This story is, in my opinion, well written. The amount of detail in this piece is quite wonderful. I absolutely love the parts where you are describing just how the two main characters are playing with you and how they went about eating you. While there may be some minor spelling or grammatical errors, they do not hinder the overall story at all. The one thing I would like to see is perhaps a little description in some parts. When describing 'the boys', the reader may not understand who is being referred to. Overall, this story was a pleasure to read and I hope to see more from you soon.